Too sweet. As in vomitus or satisfying? I should ask him which he meant, but I am certain it doesn’t matter. In either intention, he is correct. And I love the challenge that he presents. Was I writing with sincerity, I have to ask myself… Yes.
What about this case?
On the afternoon she died, because I couldn’t find her hearing aid in the shuffle of her unconscious body
On the afternoon she died, because
I couldn’t find her
Hearing aid in the shuffle of her unconscious body
There is a difference; an intentional difference. He wants to respect that difference, because I intended it that way. He taught me that the other night. He is a director.